Above is a HD third draft! Edited and ready to be shown to some more test audiences. I have already started the editing process of the next draft, but overall I am quite happy with this draft. One problem I did face was that some sound effects I have added have decided to remove themselves. Hopefully I will be able to fix this problem by the time of the fourth draft.
New to the third draft
- New scenes. These new scenes add a little bit more humour and actual content to the first half of the film. These scenes include the fob watch scene and the file scene.
- New sound effects. I've started adding more sound to the film to make the film more varied and immersing. Some sound effects add to the atmosphere while others are crucial to establishing the scene. I am going to do a blog on sound effects soon.
- The title card. The title card has finally been added and it fits quite well in my opinion. It still needs tweaking but it does work well.
Reflective Comment:
I am very happy with the my short film so far. I feel that it flows well and is improving with every draft. Test audiences have enjoyed it as well. While I would like to do so much more with the film, being realistic I think I'm getting very close to be finished with the film.
The opening is more exciting now. The props add a little more depth. I think you need to cut down the scene on the bench. It starts to drag. Some cutaways to the Reaper and his previous souls would add some comedy. I would also re record the dialogue for that scene if at all possible just in case you can't reduce the wind noise with audacity.
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